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Post by UlforceVeedramon Zero on Aug 18, 2005 13:23:32 GMT -5
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Post by Kaname on Aug 18, 2005 13:25:28 GMT -5
I think they are pretty cool i saw em a couple times and i think its great.
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Post by Nightmare on Aug 18, 2005 13:51:29 GMT -5
You really shouldn't start a comic with a 4 panel nonsense comic. And make the text a little more readable. Can't wait till the update  |
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Post by UlforceVeedramon Zero on Aug 18, 2005 13:56:48 GMT -5
Well, i had no inspiration on how to start it, and i thought of that, so i just did it. anyways, i combined #1 and #2, and there it is
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Post by UlforceVeedramon Zero on Aug 18, 2005 14:38:43 GMT -5
By the way, i need more characters. if anybody would let me use their sprite sheets in this, that'd be great  |
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Post by Andrew on Aug 18, 2005 15:43:33 GMT -5
Time to get nit-picky.. *cracks his knuckles* Alright. The comic starts out of nowhere, that's the worse way to start comics. Not only does it give the readers no bloody idea what's going on, but then we have nothing to play off what's happening now. My recommendation is to make a prologue type comic, tell what's happening, give us subtle hints to what might happen. Be creative, it's not that hard. Next! Comic speech bubbles. They're read from top to bottom, not left to right. But in case two bubbles are aligned exactly, then it's left to right. First panel makes no sense, since the guy is asking what the hell is the other guy talking about, and then the guy's asking. It's confusing. Next! People are talking, yet the mouths don't move. Easily fixed. Place a generic red shade underneath the pixel of the mouth. Voila, mouth movement. Also, leaving main characters without names is a very very bad idea. So if either of those guys plan on living, let us know their names early on. Leaving us hanging on who they are gives us little reason to like either of them or to connect with the character. That will be all. It's got potential, most comics do. It's up to the author to make it work. I hope you don't quit, even after my picking.  -Paragon |
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Post by Nightmare on Aug 18, 2005 15:48:02 GMT -5
Time to get nit-picky.. *cracks his knuckles* Alright. The comic starts out of nowhere, that's the worse way to start comics. Not only does it give the readers no bloody idea what's going on, but then we have nothing to play off what's happening now. My recommendation is to make a prologue type comic, tell what's happening, give us subtle hints to what might happen. Be creative, it's not that hard. Next! Comic speech bubbles. They're read from top to bottom, not left to right. But in case two bubbles are aligned exactly, then it's left to right. First panel makes no sense, since the guy is asking what the hell is the other guy talking about, and then the guy's asking. It's confusing. Next! People are talking, yet the mouths don't move. Easily fixed. Place a generic red shade underneath the pixel of the mouth. Voila, mouth movement. Also, leaving main characters without names is a very very bad idea. So if either of those guys plan on living, let us know their names early on. Leaving us hanging on who they are gives us little reason to like either of them or to connect with the character. That will be all. It's got potential, most comics do. It's up to the author to make it work. I hope you don't quit, even after my picking. -Paragon I'm proud of you Paragon, you gave very helpful C+C and encouragement without insulting him. And yeah, Paragon's right. And like I said, can't wait till the update. |
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Post by Netzuko Kymera on Aug 18, 2005 16:07:50 GMT -5
Time to get nit-picky.. *cracks his knuckles* Alright. The comic starts out of nowhere, that's the worse way to start comics. Not only does it give the readers no bloody idea what's going on, but then we have nothing to play off what's happening now. My recommendation is to make a prologue type comic, tell what's happening, give us subtle hints to what might happen. Be creative, it's not that hard. Next! Comic speech bubbles. They're read from top to bottom, not left to right. But in case two bubbles are aligned exactly, then it's left to right. First panel makes no sense, since the guy is asking what the hell is the other guy talking about, and then the guy's asking. It's confusing. Next! People are talking, yet the mouths don't move. Easily fixed. Place a generic red shade underneath the pixel of the mouth. Voila, mouth movement. Also, leaving main characters without names is a very very bad idea. So if either of those guys plan on living, let us know their names early on. Leaving us hanging on who they are gives us little reason to like either of them or to connect with the character. That will be all. It's got potential, most comics do. It's up to the author to make it work. I hope you don't quit, even after my picking. -Paragon I actually couldn't agree more with everything he said. One more thing, since it's an ms paint comic, here's a tip: Don't ever type the text on 1 colored background and then drag it to a different colored background. In this case it looks like you typed on a solid white bg and dragged it to the yellow and blue text bubbles. Here's my suggestion: make a big space under your comic of the color you want your bubble, then type in there the text, then use a black square tool or eclipse or w/e shape you want the bubbles to be, then once it's in the bubbles, erase all the color around it, and then drag the bubble to the panel and make the tail there. That's how I used to make my bubbles in MS Paint back before I used photoshop for comics. |
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Post by Andrew on Aug 18, 2005 16:10:27 GMT -5
I'm not always the bad guy you think I am. Ack, that's a spam post, crap. >.> <.< OMG WHO IS THE EVIL FLOATING GUY IN THE LAST PANEL!? WHEN WILL THIS MYSTERY WILL BE SOLVED!? Stay tuned for next exciting episode... >.> -Paragon |
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Post by Netzuko Kymera on Aug 18, 2005 16:14:09 GMT -5
...Next time you change the comic, please post saying so rather than editing your previous post, cuz chances are we're not gonna notice it, Hell! If I hadn't read Paragon's post I wouldn't have gone to check what he ment and read the rest of the comic.
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Post by Andrew on Aug 18, 2005 16:15:15 GMT -5
Well, i had no inspiration on how to start it, and i thought of that, so i just did it. anyways, i combined #1 and #2, and there it is He did say something about it, Netto. >.> -Paragon |
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Post by Netzuko Kymera on Aug 18, 2005 16:17:18 GMT -5
...Next time you change the comic, please post saying so rather than editing your previous post, cuz chances are we're not gonna notice it, Hell! If I hadn't read Paragon's post I wouldn't have gone to check what he ment and read the rest of the comic. You didn't read my post very well, I said to post a new post, rather than to edit an old one cuz lots of us don't read posts over and over again, so some of us may not have noticed it...I sure didn't |
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Post by UlforceVeedramon Zero on Aug 18, 2005 18:07:33 GMT -5
well, for the bubbles thing, i know what they're like (i read mangas all the time, but the bubbles are right to left. oh well) but it didnt work like that. and in some other comics i read, there was one bubble way off to the left, which was in reply to something waay off to the right (Actually i think it was Xero's comic, but im not sure)
about the mouth thing, meh, ill fiz it later
about the bubble color thing, for some reason my ms paint wont let me type in the same box as the comic, so i have to open a new window, then copy paste it on. if i try in the comic window it just says "bloop" and nothing happens...
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Post by UlforceVeedramon Zero on Aug 18, 2005 18:13:54 GMT -5
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Post by Andrew on Aug 19, 2005 13:13:01 GMT -5
When you try and do the text in the same window as the comic, are you zoomed in? If you are, that's why. You can't be zoomed in on paint and use the text tool. It doesn't like that, or something..
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