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Post by swimstud600 on Feb 24, 2006 18:27:35 GMT -5
There's alot of boring exposition starting out. All you guys really need to know is that Jet has just joined the maverick hunters and is unsure of his powers. Since he's a rookie he occasionally trys more than he can handle. Eventually he'll become the leader of maverick hunter unit #6. He joined after being recommended by Zero himself and his old friend Tank. I'm going to begin the story at night, after his first day at the hunter base.
Sirens blared and in the dead of night silence was suddenly lifted, "code red" the alarm screamed, "Maverick attack, all hunters prepare for combat." Outside the hunter base well over a hundred mavericks were attacking, leading the front were the older mavericks who had been resurrected and compared to the new reploids were weak and outdated. As the Hunters scrambled to mount the counter attack mavericks infiltrated the HQ, the sky was light up as the mavericks open fired upon the base despite their comrades entry into the hunter HQ. Signas, through the comm system yelled, "Hunters defeat the mavericks "
Its not much of a story right now but I'll type up the rest later, I've gotta go.
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Post by Sonic on Feb 27, 2006 9:09:21 GMT -5
That'll develop pretty well if you just come up with a plot and characters etc. You already got the writing skills down.
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Post by Frozt on Feb 27, 2006 18:57:23 GMT -5
Alright, the characters are sounding good!
Now include me. xDD
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Post by swimstud600 on Feb 27, 2006 19:00:53 GMT -5
There will be more later but for the first chapter these 3 are the most important.
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Post by swimstud600 on Mar 4, 2006 3:33:17 GMT -5
Disregard the posts above, I've tweaked the storyline a bit and this is the current version of the story. Here's my fanfic. Its long but really good. The three main characters are called Jet, Lixi and Reaver, (no relation to our ReaVer.) Here are their bios.
Name: Jet Model number: 61203616007 Height: 5’10” Weight: 160lbs. Weapon specialty: Sword (Will come up with a special name later.) and the Elemental Buster. Special Armor: Blue with golden trim. As he is being attacked he slowly builds up a tolerance, letteing him take greater damage to certain attacks. The trick however is surviving to build up this tolerance. Head- Machine Overide Body- Hyper Shockwave Arms- Elemental Cannon Legs- Jet boots Unit: Head of unit 6 Short bio: Formerly a lone wolf mercenary this sophisticated repeliod struggles to find purpose. Recruited by Zero to defend the humans and repeliods who DO know what their purpose is. Two of his greatest attacks are innundation wave and fire scorcher.
Name: Lixi Model number: 65393856809 Height: 5'5" Weight: 135lb Special Armor: White with pink trimming. Long, pink hair comes out the base, front and sides of her helmet. Theres a space between her pants and boots (at her knee). Quiver strapped to the right side of her hip, and backup quiver on her back. Armour stops at her elbows and she has pink gloves. Armour is also pretty curve hugging. Weapon specialty: Electric Bow and Arrows Head- Sniper Vision Body- Shockwave (when arrow hits target) Arms- Fast Shots Legs- Hyper Dash Unit: Member of Unit 5 Short bio: One of the newer modles, Lixi takes speed and accuracy over raw power. Likes to sniper from te back rather then go into the fray. Nice personality and makes friends easy.
Name: Reaver Model number: N/A Special Armor: Plain black, dark brown hair past the shoulders, no power gems. Weakness to extreme heat. Weapon specialty: Staff/Spears Head- Ability to use tissue of dead reploids to heal himself. Body- Short range teleportation Arms- Telekinetic blows Legs- Burn thrusters while dashing Unit: 9th Special Forces Short bio: Was created in the mid of a large battle at his base, he was SUPPOSED to be the new generation of fighter robots, able to handle all kinds of weaponry and practically unstoppable, but during the battle he was not finished yet, but scientists forced him to fight. Reaver's urge for honour and righteiousness didn't hestitaded a moment to fight the Mavericks. But was so blinded by the urge to protect the entire base, he couldn't manage and thus the base was destroyed. Seeing his scientists, which were his friends for life getting splattered all over the place, he just dropped to the ground crying. The mavericks didn't bother eradicating him, seeing how hopeless he was, and left the ruins. Hours later, Reaver stood up, walked away, and was looking for revenge. Although unfinished, and roughly equal to an average reploid, his only goal is to make his creators proud...
Reaver was roaming the lands, unsure of what to do. The images of the defeat still haunts his mind, the scientists screaming and dying. Leaning on his steel pipe, which is the only thing he managed to get out of the ruins, he watches the horizon... He notices a huge building, the Maverick hunter HQ! He hesitates, what if he went there? Would they help him out? Or would they suspect him being Maverick? He is about to turn around to walk away when he remembers his promise, he would make his makers proud, and avenge them. He takes his chances, and heads for the HQ, hoping they would help him out, giving him a decent weapon, maybe even a better armor. And ultimately, a chance to avenge his makers...
“Rookies Attention!” Shouted the commander, instantly all the rookies complied. “Now that the introductions are done, it is time for the combat test, you will be given your chosen weapon to display your proficiency, as a reminder we only take the best”
30 minutes later
“Alright rookies, now that you have been tested for proficiency with weapons, you will be fitted for your armors, they will be custom built and deliver to your quarters by tomorrow. Before anything let me go over the rules of staying in Maverick Hunter HQ
1.) No active weapons in the halls, we don’t want any mishaps,” the commander chuckled as he turned to see X and his friend Zero enter the room. X’s face turned a light red as the commander finished the statement. “Isn’t that right X?” laughed the commander as X’s face turned a deeper red. Zero chuckled. 2.) Stay out of other hunters personal belongings. 3.) The upper floors are off-limits to rookies, anyone caught there without reason shall face severe punishment.”
“Sooo,” Zero asked quietly as he turned to the commander “what are this years rookies like?” “Can’t complain Zero, they're a step up from what we get every other year.” The rookies faces lit up as the legendary maverick hunter X walked over to them and began to converse with a few of the new rookies, they were excitedly asking questions of X and all the things he had done. The commander turned from Zero and yelled, “Okay rookies, that’s enough for one day, you are excused. Feel free to wander around hunter HQ or retire to your rooms, the top floors are off limits to rookies though.”
Lixi followed the crowd out the door. She had been one of the ones that X had talked to. He seemed nice, asked her about her home and such. As the crowd dispersed, she wondered what to do. Most people were going out side for some fresh air, but a few people were looking around the base. She walked around, saying hello to some people. She explored most of the levels they were allowed to, just generally taking in the bustling atmosphere.
Jet stops to talk with Zero and thanks him for the recomendation to join the maverick hunters. He asks what the had planned for the rookies next, but Zero reveals nothing. "That's Zero for you. Fine keep your secrets," mutters Jet. "Hey Zero, where's Tank at? I haven't seen him in forever!" "You can check the computer database over there," Zero points, "Its got info on all of our hunters." Jet looks up Tank and sees that he is away on a mission. Jet shrugs, "I'll just take a walk and meet some of the other rookies."
Lixi frowned. She had seen a strange repliod walking towards the HQ. She watched him for a bit. Anyone who wasnt supposed to go in there wouldn't just walk through the front door in broad daylight, so she ignored him. "Geez am I bored," she thought to herself. Then she saw another reploid talking with Zero. She recognised him as a rookie! But then, he walked passed her and disappeared into the crowd. "Ack!" She thought, "Lost him..." Sighing, she made her way to the armoury. "Hope they won't mind me borrowing a bow and some arrows. I think I might go train a bit... I'll find a friend later."
Jet walks around the base. He sees a weapons room and recharges all ammo. "I should probably get ready for my first assignment," Jet thought spying a training room. "I don't know what it will be about but some training couldn't hurt."
When Reaver finally makes it to the entrance, a guard stops him, asking why he is here. After explaining his current situation, the guard lets him pas, but warns him to report to the head of HQ immedeatly. So Reaver heads to the command center and requests for permission to stay in the HQ. After a long discussion he finally gets what he wants, he is allowed to join the hunters. "You couldn't have come at a better time, we just got some new rookies at the base so one more wouldn't be much of a problem. We just consider you to be one of the new ones and everything will be ok." The person smiles, gives a friendly handshake, and Reaver leaves the Command center... Satisfied, he heads to the armory in hopes to get a decent weapon...
Sirens blared and in the dead of night silence was suddenly lifted, "Code Red" the alarm screamed, "Maverick attack, all hunters prepare for combat!" Outside the hunter base well over a hundred mavericks were attacking, leading the front were the older mavericks who had been resurrected and compared to the new reploids were weak and outdated. As the Hunters scrambled to mount the counter attack mavericks infiltrated the HQ, the sky was light up as the mavericks open fired upon the base despite their comrades entry into the hunter HQ. Signas, through the comm system yelled, "Hunters defeat the mavericks!"
As night fell Jet was in the simulation room laying waste to all the attacking enemies. The battles were incredibly lifelike, the robot simulations are patterned after real mavericks the hunters had faced before. After effortlessly destroying wave after wave of foot soldiers, Jet decides to jack up the difficulty. Upon re-entering the room he finds the grunts have now been replaced with Vile clones. After getting his butt kicked, Jet decides not to be so guy thingyy and increases the difficulty a bit slower. After the next round Jet sees that the next battle will be with another rookie. As his opponent walks through the door the room shakes. Jet startes to marvel once again at how realistic the battle simulations are when the speaker blares out "Maverick attack, all hunters prepare for combat!" Jet looks at his opponent and suggests they postpone their match and go take on some real mavericks. After leaping through a window, they see that the building truly was surrounded. Though it was reckless and stupid they decide to charge and break enemy lines. Jet fires his jet boots and dodges enemy fire. He ignites an odd lance that he "borrowed" from the armory earlier and begins swooping down on the troops, slashing and hacking with grim accuracy. "Wow my first maverick," thinks Jet, "This is just like the simulation! I wish Tank were here to see this!" The other rookie wasn't doing too bad either. She was currently surrounded by a group of soldiers but Jet felt comfident that she could take care of themself. Even so, Jet decided that it couldn't hurt to help and headed over. Suddenly a beam of ice knocked Jet out of the air. Unfortunately ice happened to be Jet's weakest element, (though he had a body chip which makes him more resistant with every shot he survives.) Jet sits up to see the maverick general of all the troops he had just destroyed. Jet couldn't care less. He stands up, puts on a guy thingyy grin and charges the Elemental Cannon. "Don't make me use my scorcher you scum..."
Lixi wondered how she would get out of this one. She was surrounded by mavericks. One jumped at her and she whacked it away. She heared a shot and whirled around. The other rookie had been hit by a blue beam. But he started moving, so she guessed he was okay. She had to worry about herself... suddenly she had an idea. She jumped and did a backflip, and landed on the shoulders of a maverick. "Eh?!" It had time to say before she jumped again and fired an arrow mid air, hitting it square between the eyes. "Lucky I did some training for a bit..." She landed and started to run back towards the base, looking for a good spot to snipe from."
Reaver ran through the hallways, with his newly acquired scythe on his back. The alarms were still going off. "Crap, it must really be bad," he thinks. He heads off towards the entrance of the base, where some mavericks already seemed to have entered, others were already at the scene, trying to hold of the invading mavericks. "Hehehe, payback time," he thinks infuriated. He turns on the scythe, a bloodred laserblade lights up, and a smaller sharp laser lights up from the rear end. Filled with hatred and bloodlust, he dashes off into the mavericks, while emiting a loud battlecry. He thinks to himself, "I will not make the same mistake twice!"
Jet lets loose a blast of fire. Jet had never used the flame scorcher before and though it torched the maverick general beyond recognition and incinerated his remaining troops it took up far too much energy. "Auto repair will kick in after awhile," he thinks "I can't do anything reckless until then." Jet decides to head back to the building where he would only have to defend from 3 sides. As he staggers over he notices the other rookie, and that with her bow, she is more of a ranged fighter. "I can't do any more alone in this state," he thinks. Jet shouts to the female rookie, "There will be time for introductions later. For now I'm going to guard the back door. Want to stand behind me and snipe?"
Lixi was annoyed. There wasn't one good sniper spot from where she could see. "There will be time for introductions later. For now I'm going to guard the back door. Want to stand behind me and snipe?" She turned. It was the other rookie from before! "Sure," she answered. "Lead the way!" They made their way back towards the building, Lixi sniped out most mavericks before they could even get close to them. Jet couldn't help but admire her skill with the bow. Finally they were at the building!
After reaching the building Jet hurried to the doorway. As mavericks tried to get inside Jet slashed, hacked and kicked away everything that got close enough. Every now and then the other rookie hunter would hold her bow over Jet's sholder and fire. They were doing very well but the mavericks just couldn't take a hint that they weren't getting in the back door. They kept coming...
Enraged, Reaver hacked through the platoon at the entrance. Slashing through the hordes of cannon fodder with his weapon, he took heavy damage, but it didn't seem to hold him back, the fire support from behind really had to watch where they were firing to avoid shooting Reaver. Emiting loud battle cries, some hunters were getting worried Reaver wouldn't turn maverick...
Reaver, still fighting the group, gets heavily damaged, but continues in his rage. But due this enraged state, he doesn't observe the other, stronger mavericks of the platoon. One of the mavericks charged his fist, hitting Reaver full frontal in the face. Reaver steps backward, dizzy from the blow. The maverick continues his blows, and eventually uses a high kick to drop him on the ground. The maverick chuckles, grabs him at his neck, and holds him high above the group. "Idiot..." the maverick says to him, and throws him through the hallway, slamming him into the wall behind the firesupport group.
Lixi was slowly getting more and more annoyed. "Is this what battles are like? Geez they're repetitive!" she thought as she fired another arrow. It hit a maverick in the chest, and it fell over. She reached for another arrow... and didn't find one. "Uh-oh," She said. "What?!" yells Jet. "I ran outta arrows..." She kicked away a maverick. "I'm trying to think! Ah. No other choice, I have to go to the armory. Wanna come with?"
Reaver lay in the rubble of the wall. "Ugh, god... my hole body hurts... shouldn't be so reckless next time..." he thinks. While lying there, he has time to calm down, coming back to his senses, he realizes his entire body is heavily damaged, one of his feet is paralyzed, and blood drips from his head. His scythe lies next to him, he turns it of and uses it to get up. But without him, the support unit has no frontal defenses and the maverick which utterly defeated Reaver, now turns on the support group, soon to be swarmed by the platoon of mavericks... Reaver looks around, looking for a way to help out, considering he can't fight anymore... A headset falls in front of him, probally from the commander of the fire support team. He picks it up, and immedeatly tries to contact the HQ. Not waiting for a reply, he yells as soon as he has contact: "THE FRONT HAS BEEN BREACHED! SEND REINFORCEMENTS AS SOON AS YOU CAN!!!!" Reaver hangs up, moments later, a voice can be heard over the intercom, asking for forces to move to the entrance...
After the other hunter runs out of ammo Jet faces a dilema. Does he protect her as she makes her way to the armory or stay by the back door to make sure mavericks do breach the building. Then he hears the intercom announcement, "THE FRONT HAS BEEN BREACHED! SEND REINFORCEMENTS AS SOON AS YOU CAN!!!!" Jet swears under his breath and slams the ground creating a shockwave causing the wall in front of the door to collapse. "It'll take them awhile to get through that," Jet tells his partner, "Lets hurry to the armory and get you more ammo, then we've got to back up the front enterance!"
Lixi was shifting through all the arrows and bows in the armoury. Jet had given her great cover on the way to the armory. Every maverick they met along the way was quickly hacked into a heap of parts. "You done yet?!" he yelled from the door. "Hold your horsies! I'm looking for a better bow! The one I have now is only a practice bow..." "A new bo- Oh come on! The one you have now is fine! We have to hurry!" "Ah-hah! I knew they had a good bow around here somewhere!" Lixi thought grabbing a different bow from near the back, and the bunch of arrows next to it. This quiver had more arrows then the last one so she only grabbed the new one. "Done!" She said running out. "Good. Now we have to go help the others." "Right!" She answered. "Lets go!"
Reaver found refugee behind two hallway turrets, where he kicked over a table and hid behind it while shooting with a rifle he conveniently got from a dead guy. He positioned the blade of the scythe so it functioned as a small triplaser if the mavericks would get too close to him. But he knew that he wouldn't last long in his state... "Where the hell are those reinforcements!?" he thought impatiently.
As if to answer his question the hall was flooded with a torent of water. The inundation effectively destroys several mavericks and sweeps the remainder out the door. Jet looks at the other hunters, "This time we hold them. We stop them here!"
A thunderous crack resounded in the area, the battle stopped and all eyes turned toward the maverick hunter base. The doors exploded off the hinges with the force that crushed a maverick like a tin can. As the smoke cleared, X and Zero and a host of elite hunters stood, all with weapons armed. The mavericks fought on but with these new reinforcements, their end was swift and brutal. All the rookies watched in awe as X, Zero and the elite hunters slaughtered the mavericks.
As the mavericks were destroyed the hunters gaped in awe at the blue blood which covered the ground where the mavericks fell. The hunters carefully collected this strange substance to be analyzed.
X called everyone to the command room, standing before the crowd, he began, "Well, it looks like we fended off the attack but the base sustained heavy internal damage, so for now we'll be moving to the Infinity space station. So for now pack up your stuff and the hypershutle will deliver you to the station." After X finished, the hunters gabbed their things and boarded the ship, within the hour they were standing in the super station Infinity. Over the comm they heard, "Welcome hunters, please make yourselves at home in our advanced facilities, our training room is open and the stores have supplies for you, the rooms will be assigned shortly, but if you need a nap the lounge has some couches for sleep. Please enjoy your stay."
END OF CHAPTER 1 (I haven't got the whole series planned, I don't know if I'll even make an ending, the series might go on forever. Other characters may be ended. If you want to cameo fill out a bio like the 3 above and send it to me in a pm.)
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Post by swimstud600 on Mar 4, 2006 18:15:50 GMT -5
Here is a preview of chapter 2, I'm deciding which mission they should go on and if they should slip up or all go to one.
X called everyone to the command room, standing before the crowd, he began, "Well, it looks like we fended off the attack but the base sustained heavy internal damage, so for now we'll be moving to the Infinity space station. So for now pack up your stuff and the hypershutle will deliver you to the station." After X finished, the hunters gabbed their things and boarded the ship, within the hour they were standing in the super station Infinity. Over the comm they heard, "Welcome hunters, please make yourselves at home in our advanced facilities, our training room is open and the stores have supplies for you, the rooms will be assigned shortly, but if you need a nap the lounge has some couches for sleep. Please enjoy your stay."
Reaver looked around, looking for the other reploids who came to his aid earlier back on earth, but didn't see them anywhere. "Bah, I'll thank them later." Leaning heavily on the scythe, as they didn't gave him the change to search for medical attention yet, he sets of in search for a sickbay... Jet breathes a sigh of relief as he thinks once more about the previous battle. Jet and his companion had cleared out the enterance breifly but the new mavericks were swarming in, with only a handfull of hunters, including one who had been lying on the floor gravely injured. It would have been hard to fight off that onslaught while protecting him at the same time. "I'm just glad X and Zero arrived when they did," Jet thinks. He woundered where that hunter was now, and where the female hunter who had helped him outside was. Jet sets off to find the training room of this new facility. "The scorcher is insanely powerful," thinks Jet, "but I'm not strong enough to use it. If I want to become more than a hinderance to the hunters, I need to train harder."
"There you go! Just keep the bandage clean and it'll be good as new very soon!" the Nurse said. "Thanks!" Lixi replied as she walked out the door, holding her bandaged arm. She had a nasty cut down the side of her upper arm and hadn't realized until she felt the blood leaking down her arm. But, it was all bandaged now and she was feeling good. She wondered what the time was. The battle had seemed to go on forever, yet only a few minutes at the same time. She looked around the station, trying to find the rookie hunter that had helped her, but couldn't see him anywhere. "Oh well. Guess introductions are going to be put off for even longer," she though to herself. "I wonder what's going to happen to us now?"
"There, that should do it, judging from your wounds, you have been quite reckless down there on earth. Just take it easy, you won't be the first rookie who gets destroyed because of overestimating himself..." the medic said. Feeling insulted by his words, Reaver left the sickbay without saying a word. He seemed to be completely recovered, those doctors really seemed to know what they were doing. Standing on the hallway, he isn't really certain where to go... He didn't really felt much for training, and he disliked large spaces like cafeteria's for reasons unknown, he decided to look for a library or a database of enemy's he would be allowed to access, as he still had much to learn about the world he lived in... considering it was only a few days ago he was awakened, with little to no knowledge programmed into him... But Reaver was unable a library. "No one ever values knowledge anymore..." he grumbled. Feeling a bit angered about this, he headed to the training room to let go some aggression.
After a day passes, the hunters are all settled in, injuries are taken care of and everyone has their rooms. Over the intercom they hear, "Commander X requests the following hunters to report to the mission briefing room," the speaker reels of a list of names including Jet's, Lixi's and Reaver's. Within 5 minutes the hunters are standing in the room, “Congratulations rookies on your first battle, no doubt many of you will do very well here, we had few casualties and not much damage was done to the surrounding areas, though Hunter HQ was fairly damaged,” said X, standing in front of the mission briefing computer. “Now as it comes to my attention there are 2 missions that require your attention.” X as he turned to the mission computer behind him and it flickered it on, displaying a write up of the missions and a graphical representation of the terrains of the area. "There are 2 missions which require attention, please select which you want to take care of first."
On the screen the following is displayed Mission - Investigate a mysterious signal in the Amazon jungle. Briefing- A mysterious signal has been spoted eminating from the jungle, we suspect a rise in maverick activity, investigate and report findings.
Mission - Persue the maverick in New York city. Briefing- In downtown new york a maverick general is leading a large band of minions though the streets tearing everything apart. Put a stop to the destruction before more people get hurt.
"Please choose which mission you want to go on."
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Post by Arashi on Mar 4, 2006 18:18:03 GMT -5
Thats long. I didnt read it all yet, but im going to. Ill check for spelling errors...
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Post by swimstud600 on Mar 4, 2006 18:27:01 GMT -5
I don't think you'll find spelling errors. I checked that twice last night before I submitted it to the carnival. The thread said I'd be docked points for spelling errors so I was really careful.
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Post by Arashi on Mar 4, 2006 18:32:59 GMT -5
Ahhh, good. It sounds good swimmy, I didnt see any mistakes, either.
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Post by swimstud600 on Mar 4, 2006 18:41:10 GMT -5
You read it all? I hope the judges have the patience to read the entire thing. Is it kind of addicting to read, something you don't want to put down or is it kind of boring and a pain to sit through the entire thing?
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Post by Arashi on Mar 4, 2006 23:31:28 GMT -5
Its quite good actually, dont worry, its not boring at all.
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Post by RELLIK on Mar 5, 2006 2:45:05 GMT -5
nice. i like the sound of reaver. does that name mean anything in greek or some language? imjust curious if anyone knew?
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Post by swimstud600 on Mar 5, 2006 13:54:16 GMT -5
I don't think it really means anything, I just think reaver is a popular name.
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Post by Sonic on Mar 7, 2006 12:50:45 GMT -5
Good stuff, Swim. You definitley got a lot of material in there, but it doesn't get boring. And there are a few spelling/punctuation errors, but nothing big so don't worry. I like everyone's personality too, you did a good job of giving them one.
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