The Cyber Kinetic

[Xzero]

It is the year 2000 in the average world of today in a City called Kintaro. The world is coming to a new age as Famous scientist gather for the new years coming. Dr. Richard Sid has invented a machine designed for generating free energy off satalites in the solar system transmiting energy through radio wave to the machine using the sun as a power source. The oepning for the machine is today. A big croud is gather and the good doctor stands with his 2 sons Vian and Trent.

"Now is the time Kintaro!" shouted the Dr. Sid, " Now is the time for free energy!!!!" Vian tappen Dr. Sid's shoulder " Granpa, do you think everyone should be here? this looks really dangerous." Nonesense!" said the doctor "Everything is going to be alright. Trust me boy..." Vian walks off to a group of boys consisting of Trent and there best freind: Gen, and there father. " Come now boys lets take our seets near the machine, your grandfather worked really hard to get us those seats." They all sit down behind Dr. Sid and watch as he begins turning on the machine. " Here we go!"

as he pulls the lever to start the machine a loud explosion is heard inside the machine the energy in the town doubles and all the lights get brighter but then they dim out and the machine glows. the father, Dr. Sid, and the boys all make a run for it but the machine explodes sending waves of energy out trough there oblitirating the audience.and disentagrating the others as Vian watches ; himself disintegrating as well. The scream die out as he sees one final explosion near his grandfather. His grandfather is completley engulfed as are his borhter his father and his freind. Then nothing black.

sight becomes visable in vians eyes again. It is blurry but he makes out a desert and Bald man in green with a cape. Then he closes his eyes and becomes uncouncious once more.

End of Chapter 1 -------------------------------------------------------------

~XZERO VAINSTAR><TRENT RUBY~---------------------------------------



So tell me what you think everyone its my first fanfic and i wil ldefinetly be making more.

[swimstud600]

Its not much of a story yet. I definately wouldn't call that a chapter, more of a preview. Depending on where you take this it could be good or it could really flop.

[Xzero]

Sight is viasable it is still yet blurry. Vian feels much pain and cannot move his left arm, or the lowere half of his right leg. half his vission is black and great apin come form that saide of his head he can make out blood around him and a cell door in front of him, he is hooked up to some machine. Infront of him is the bald man again. "You boy are great source of energy and in your crppled state you have no chance against me. *BOOM* There is an explosion near the room. "Sleep tight boy." The bald man disappears. Some time passes about half an hour vian is feeling woozy and hears a voice, "Hmm so this is the power core of sigmas fortress. i have no cahnce of destroying anything in here without being blown to bits.... Maybe if i could damge it somehow or remove a part to lower his defences power somewhat." Vian now sees a strange Red figure. He has long hair and a pointy head. " Help me" Crys vian. " Huh?" The red figure notices Vian "What in the hell..., Sigma that sick bastard. using this human to boost his power." The red figure stops for a second " since when does a human have this much power.. , in any cas ei better take him to doctor cain" The red figure walks twoards vian and uncounsious vian goes once more.

"AHH!" Vian wakes up staring at the cieling, he feels no mroe pain he is in a bigger room and in a bed. Where they was once pain now there is a strange feeling. Like everything is okay but differnt. Vian get up" Where am i? A women turns around " oh hunny your awake im so glad. Welcome to Maverick Hunter Headquarters. I am Jeen, nice to meet you ." says the women Vain looks around and looks into a mirror " OH MY GOD" Screams vian. he is in nothing but underwear, but is shocked to see his right eye is a purple and has machinery around it, while his left arm and the right part of his leg that were once in pain are now machinerey as well. " Whats happen to me ! What in the fudge is going on!." "calm down!" bellows the Jeen " It was the only way to save you., and besides your not the only one look around you!" Vian looks to his left to find a fully armored Person with black spike hair. the armor is blue and silver and has a noted pad with the words Netzuko Kymera- Cyborg #3. Vian notices he is # 2 and look to his right . "TRENT!?!?!" There is his brother Trent both his arms are mechanical and part of both his legs ar mechanial as is a part of his chest. " What the Hell happeend to us ?!!"

End of Chapter 2 -------------------------------------------------------------

~XZERO VAINSTAR><TRENT RUBY~---------------------------------------

[swimstud600]

...develop this more, I'm not sure what kind of story you're telling yet. I noticed some things that don't sound right that could have been substituted or deleted but you'll get better as you write more. Maybe I'm the only one that notices these things, English always was my subject.