The Multi verse World.

[cryo]

It's been many years since I've written anything. I'm going to try my luck with this. Here goes....

The sun was just halfway below the horizon, setting over a beach. The waves washed up and over the sand. A crab walked along the sand before being taken into the watery-depths by the wave. Seagulls flew over the water, calling out to each other. A black sphere suddenly appeared on the shore, casting bolts of light-blue electricity from it's sides. Inside the sphere, a dark-blue circle appeared inside it, growing even larger as time passed. The black sphere was soon completely dark-blue. The middle of the sphere opened in the middle, from the top and the sides soon vanished as they fell to the sand. A light-blue and teal reploid lay curled up on a sheet of glass. The reploid placed his white gloved-hand on his helmet, rising to examine his surroundings. Soon.... it would begin....

X placed his white gloved-hand on his helmet. He slowly rose, looking all around him, seeing where he was. "Ugh... jeez" he groaned. "Wh.... Where am I" he asked. X stumbled forward, as he tried to walk. "Total head rush..." X said, slowly taking his hand off of his helmet. He walked along the shore, feeling the cold ocean breeze blow against his face. To him; it felt like it was mid-summer/early fall. He didn't shiver, he simply ignored it and appreciating it. X stopped to look out in the distance. He saw trees out in the distance but it was to far away to see any sign of life. He wondered "How did I get here? What's my purpose for being on this island? Why am I here?"

Night fell on the now inhabited island. X sat upon the sand. He enjoyed a nice sunset, like he always did. He rose and turned around. He was facing palm trees and grass.... Something he hadn't noticed before. "Why didn't I see this before?" he asked in wild confusion. Vivid imagines popped up in his head. Most of them involving Sigma and diabolical machines 'placing' the forest where it now stood. Some involving the whole island being a hologram and someone was out to get him. Others were logical explanations of this whole thing being a dream. X felt himself falling to the sand, face first. He rolled on his back and was looking down a buster. A voice demanded "What is this place? Who are you?" X tried to see the color of the buster and the face of the reploid pointing the buster in his face but the half moon was well hidden behind clouds. X slowly rose to his feet. "Don't do anything rash now....."


****Author's note*****
I'll add more later on.
Let's just see how this
does.If it gets good views
then I'll add another part.

[Drayconis]

well written, i like. the only thing that bothers me is it should be Rash not rational in that last line. Rational would be a good thing for X..

[swimstud600]

I think you got a little too descriptive with his enterence there, what with all the spheres and circles, some of it seems a little bit redundant. And Dray is right, the word shouldn't be 'rational.' Other than that it looks fairly good, I'd like to know what's going on and what's going to happen next.

[cryo]

Well, I had rash but it seemed incorrect to me as I proof read it. I'll fix it if it's that much trouble. And thanks for the feedback! Feedback makes the world go 'round.

[Sonic]

nice, nice...I mean yeah there was a typo here and there but the story has potential so far. Good job.

[Professor Fann]

Hmm ... not bad for a start. Personally I see nothing wrong with the sphere description. In fact, the world thing isn't too elongated, the descriptions, enough to drag the story.

[Astro]

[glow=blue,2,300]Neat! I'd like to see what happens to X.[/glow]

[cryo]

The half moon was well hidden beneath dark, grey clouds. The sound of relaxing waves hitting the shore could be heard in the backround. X was now facing an unknown repliod with a buster pointed at his face. X had no idea how to look at this. One false move could be his last. He had no energy tanks or weapons other then his buster. The unknown reploid was now charging his buster. Skew-ree-ree-ree-ree.

X's eyes widened. He had only known this reploid several minutes and already he was going to be shot at. "Hey. Come on. You don't want to do this" X said clamly, trying to reason with the reploid. "Oh? Do I?" the reploid replied angrily, his charged shot growing bigger. "X. You have no idea what it's like, living in your shadow" he told X. "I thought it would be fun having you around, but you never woke up and Dr. Light never woke up either" he yelled. The charge shot was now as big as a cantelope. It gave off a dim light but enough of it to see the unknown reploid's face. His face was half gone, wires and bits of steel hung from the missing side of his face.

From what X saw, he looked like a young boy. His eyes were light blue as was his helmet. A string of dark blue hair hung from a hole in the forehead of his tattered helmet. "You must've seen alot of combat" X asked him. "What if I have? What does it matter to you?" "Well, you're helmet is tattered and broken." "Enough of this small talk. You die X!" The old reploid got on one leg and slid underneath X, pointing his buster upwards and shooting the charge shot in between X's legs. X backflipped, balancing on one hand, pointing his buster at the sliding reploid and shooting three shots before landing on his feet.

He slid forward towards X, stopping infront of him. He now lay on his back, looking up at the sky. "Dr. Light..... He said.... He said you'd be perfect...." the reploid struggled to say. "Who are you, reploid" X asked in a demanding sort of way. "Reploid? Ha ha ha. I'm no reploid. I'm an android, much like you..... X." X didn't know what to say, so he listened to the android. "X... Before I die... I want to let you know... I'm..... I'm....." he muttered. "I'm... rah.... rah..... rah........... kuh." He closed his eyes and the sound of him sutting down could be heard. bbeeeeooooo-oooooo X looked at the dead android. "What was he trying to say?"

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A sphere appeared on the other side of the island, white in color. A little red sphere appeared inside the white sphere. The red sphere soon grew to the size of the white sphere, over-lapping the white, but the colors never mixed. A crack appeared in the top of the sphere. More cracks followed as the one in the top of the sphere appeared. The sphere was soon covered in cracks. In a matter of seconds, the sphere exploded sending out glass in every direction. Where the sphere was, a man stood. His knees were half-bent, his arms out to his sides bent upwards where the forearm connected to the elbow. His fists were closed tight against his red fighting gloves. His face and head were pointed up at the sky.

[swimstud600]

You write short chapters, much shorter than what I usually see people post. Not that that has to be a bad thing, I'm just commenting. Still would be nice to learn what's going on but I'm sure that'll come later. I'm also kind of wondering who X's attacker was, I think I know but I'll wait and see.

[cryo]

I know I write short chapters. I like to build up suspense and leave you with "I wonder what's going to happen next?" I'm sure you know who X's attacker was, but don't spoil it for everyone if you know!

[Professor Fann]

Not bad a read indeed. Keep it up. This is most exciting since the last best fanfic I read.